these are the stories that I came up with plz read them and tell me what you guys think
Sock a thumb

There was a boy
Very good boy
There was one
Problem with this son
He sucks his thumb
Even though say’s “don’t “his mom
She told many times to him
You are not a baby like Kim
It was kindergarten time
Moma told him one more time
My John that I love so much
Do not suck your thumb Mluch Mluch
Your friends will teas you
They see and laugh at you
This is going to hurt you
He did not pay attention
Socked his thumb in kindergarten
His friends saw him
They made big fun of him
Very sad he got home to his mom
Promised no to suck his thumb

Nell and matches

There was cut girl
Her name was Nell
She had a pretty doll
This was her favorite doll
Her name was May
She was with her very day
When her mother was out one day
She played with matches that day
Even though her mama warned her
Explained how dangerous it is to her
She said if you become fool
Play with matches it will be hurtful
She though he mom is a liar
So she made fire
When she was enjoying the beauty
Fire dropped on her cuty
Yes, May was on fire
Lost its’ beauty that fire
She screamed and cried she may
Can get some help for May
The door got open, mama came
But it was over the game
It was too late, in flash
Her beautiful May turned to ash
Now Nell fully understands
She should listen to her mother’s commands
She must be wise
Listen to her advice

Kelly Smelly

The town that Kelly lived in
Every body was clean
Except Kelly
Who was smelly
His hair
Was everywhere
With his nail
You can open mail
He needs to lake a shower
His look and smell is a bother
His mother told him to clean up
Cut your hair and nails hurry up
He said no
I want to go
Find a friend who is fun
To play with in the sun
Moma said to Kelly
You can’t find a friend because you are smelly
But he left the house
With his dirty blouse
He went and found
Bobby playing in playground
Kelly asked him
To be friend with him
He said no
I have to go
Kelly asked where you going
Don’t you want to do some playing?
Bobby replied well
What can I tell
Nail long, hair messy, face dirty weeeee
I have to go, sorry
Then Kelly saw Janet
Walking with her pet
Kelly asked Janet
If she wanted to play net
She said no
I have to go
Kelly asked where you going
Don’t you want to do some playing?
Janet replied well
What can I tell
Nail long, hair messy, face dirty weeeee
I have to go, sorry
After that Kelly saw Sara
Playing with her friend Tara
Kelly asked if they
Want a body to play
They said no
We have to go
Kelly asked where you going
Don’t you want to do some playing?
They replied well
What can we tell
Nail long, hair messy, face dirty weeeee
I have to go, sorry
Kelly ran home to clean up
He told his mom “help me hurry up”
Next time when he is about
To close the door and go out
Everybody tends
To be his friends
So his Moma was right
Clean boy can find friend with no fight

I have decided to do a creative project instead of continuing my midterm draft. I am going to pick 3 stories off of Hoffmann’s book and redo them. The stories I want to work on are shock-headed peter, sock a thumb, and Harriet and the matches. I will keep the theme the same but make the ending less violent.
I am doing to draw pictures for each story. Unfortunately, my drawing is awful, but I will give it a shut. I hope it terns out ok.
For shock-headed pitter I am going to continue the story and give an ending to it.
For sock a thumb my ending will be that he did not listen to his mother and his thumb shrunk.
For Harriet and the matches, she plays with matches and burns her doll.
What do you guys think?

In the introduction of Alice in wonderland, I read that Carroll loved little girls and took naked picture of them and also he was attracted to Alice. There are many jokes within the story that are private jokes intended solely for Alice. As I was reading the book I was curious about these jokes, and I wanted to know why he made those jokes.
By knowing the history behind this story my point of view changed and I started looking at the story in different way.

This is my midterm/final draft. I think my introduction and conclusion need to be revised. Can you tell me how I can improve my draft? Can you look to see if I supported my claim? Did I use other sources efficiently to support my claim? Is my essay focused or not. I have to take it to writing center for grammar check.
I think this assay need lots of work, I will appreciate your comments on it.

Parya Bannazadeh
Midterm paper
Lisa Thornhill
7/11/05

Violence in children literature
Every day children are being bombarded with violence through media, games, and books. Violence is part of human life and is irresistible. There is no way to avoid children from facing violence in this society, but what is possible is to control the violence that they are exposed to. Children in younger ages are in a sensitive period and they should not be exposed to violence. Books such as Struwwelpeter can have a negative affect on children.
One way that children can be exposed to violence is through the stories that parents read to them. Children enjoy lessoning to fairy tales. If the fairy tale is involved with violence, it affects children behavior. “5-yr.-old children were scored for themes of violence and correlated with their mothers' reports of aggressive or fearful behaviors” (McCarley 222).
Example of children books that introduce violence to younger aged children is Struwwelpeter written by Heinrich Hoffman.
Hoffmann believed that child learns only through the eye, and it only understands that which it sees. It does not know anything whatsoever to do with moral prescripts. Don’t get dirty, be careful with match, behave yourself, are empty words for child. By looking at picture and tells a story or illustrates a lesson, the child learns what to do (Zipes 134)
It might be true that children learn through picture and stories that are contain lesson, but that doe not mean these lessons have to be taught in violent way. For example, in the story of suck a thumb Conrad looses his thumb because he did not listen to his mother that if he dose not stop the great tall tailor will cut his thumbs (Hoffmann 38). These stories might be a temporary solution to miss behavior of children, in the long run it cause more problems. It grows fear in children, brings down their self esteem and curiosity level. “From at least the mid-eighteenth century through today, adults have used children's literature as a means of transmitting ideology, repressing children, and assuring adult mastery-often through inducing fear” (Stallcup). This is exactly what Hoffman did by writing Struwwelpeter. Hoffmann himself had a strict and abusive father that believed on discipline and control. As Jack Zipers describes, Hoffmann by putting humor in to his book tried to eliminate the affect of his father, and by drying exaggerated and harsh tried to find a way to take a control over his son (133). Zipers believe that “He wanted them to respond to the same directives he responded to from his father directives he internalized, modified, and passed on through stories and pictures” (133). This shows that Hoffmann himself suffered from the strict behavior of his father and this behavior affected his adulthood.
There are many stories like Hoffmann’s stories that bring anxiety and fear to children life. By the time they realize the purpose of adult by telling them these stories, it might be late and story has made its destructive affect on them. There is no need to fallow suggestions of a man who suffered from an abusive father to discipline children. Using violence for young children, whose personality is forming, is out of question.

Works cited
Hoffmann, Heinrich. Shock-Headed Pete. Trans. Ann E. Illinois: Bolchazy-Carducci Publishers, 2002

McCarley, Kelli. “Significance of violence in stories of young children.” Psychological Reports. Vol. 93. August 2003.

Stallcup, Jackie E. “Power, fear, and children’s picture books.” children’s Literature. Vol. 30. 2000.
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Zipes, Jack. “The Perverse Delight of Shockheaded Peter.” Theater. 2000

He was born in 1805 in Denmark. His father was a shoemaker. He lost his father at age 11 and his mother became washer woman. He got paid to entertain people. He left his home town and moved to Copehagen. Year after he was dance and singing pupil in royal theater. Administer of royal theater sent him schooling. He returned to royal theater after passing final exam. On his first collection of poems in royal theater his name became well known. He traveled abroad many times and wrote many successful stories.
I think reasons of his success can be because he traveled a lot. He was familiar with many cultures, people, and their stories. Also he combined his childhood fairytales with his personal experiences and time to time with philosophical gravity.

I am not quite sure what I am going to write. For now I think I am going to develop my idea on response paper and may be include Hoffmann as well. I want to find out more about violence in children’s book. I want to know how violence fairy tales affect them when they are still a child. As they grow up, is the affect going to fade out, or it will affect their adulthood. I think that violence stories affect children when they are kids and will stay with them through out of their adulthood. Human personality forms at early ages, so behavior of adults and stories that they expose to through media and books will affect their personality when they grow up

Cinderella

By only watching Disney version of Cinderella, you might think that this story is made for children to entertain them. Looking at this story deeply and reading other versions of it, you see that it is not only a children story. Cinderella story in some of the versions are so graphic and impose violence, too materialistic, and affect gender role.

Children stories should not be violent. Children are sensitive, so stories that are violent, graphic, and scary can play with their mind in negative way. In the sexton version of Cinderella, Cinderella’s sisters amputated their toe and heel and dove pecked their eyes out at the wedding ceremony. Children visualization is very good. Telling them these things has bad affects on them and it might affect them for long period of time. What dove did at the wedding teaches children to revenge. It teaches them whoever heart you keep them in mind and get back to them because they deserve it. Stone version of the story is not as violence as sexton, but it still contains cutting and blood which is not appropriate for children of younger age.

Stories teach things to children. It is better to be things that affect children behavior in positive way. Cinderella story is mostly about appearance, which can put this in to children’s mind that they must be beautiful and ware nice and expensive clothing to be appealing to other people. It shows when she had nothing nobody paid attention to her and she was living in the adage, but as soon as she wares gorgeous dress with the help of dove or godmother she stands out.

Cinderella story shows woman as a passive and shallow character. When sexton talks about ball as marriage marketing, gives the reader this right to think of woman as material. Sexton says it load, but this marriage marketing is in all the versions of this story. This type of stories put this in children’s mind that they should look good be pretty so they can win the completion and live happily ever after. This story brings the value of woman down. There is no equality between male and female.

The corrected version of this story must have no violence in it, Gives more active role to Cinderella, and makes it less like marketing deal. The role of fairy godmother can be gives her worlds of advice and courage, so she can stand and improve herself and get what she wants.

Works cited

Sexton, Anne “Cinderella”, Transformations, p. 53-57
Stone, John, “Cinderella”, Fairy tales, p. 191-196

Hi everyone
I am Parya. I am biochemistry major and math miner. I like to try different things other than science; not everything is about science, plus having only science is frustrating.
I had really hard time picking name. After spending lots of time thinking, I came up with Maya and Willie. I do not know how much you guys are familiar with them; they are two newborn honey bee workers. Maya is carouse like to try new thinks and is very brave; on the other hand, Willie is laid back, lazy, coward, and silly. They are best friends, and they are together through all adventures. I think I am a mixture of these two bees. I am from Iran. I grow up with different kind of cartoons. This one was one of the cartoons that I enjoyed watching as a kid. The fairy tales that I grew up with are different and are based on Persian (Iranian) culture, literature, and history. I have seen many Disney movies and I enjoyed them, but I am not familiar with these fairy tales as much as you guys are
My presentation topic is on Hoffman’s Struwwelpeter. To be honest, I have no clue about this topic. I looked at the book, it looked interesting. When I read the part about shock-headed Peter, it reminded me of a story character in Iran called Hassani. He was like Peter.
There is lot to learn in this class. Hopefully by end of the quarter I get to know many things about these fairy tales.